Past midnight,
Little lights shine all over the sky
Reminding me of the sparkle in your eyes
A moon,
the shape of your smile.
A soothing breeze blows
Bracing my skin
As you did long ago.
Soon it turns cold
Just like us.
Thank you for bearing with me and reading it! That was my first attempt ever at writing a poem.
I know its terrible for a start. But if I need to write something good, I’ll have to start with something as bad!
Oh and by the way, that has nothing to do with my life!
Any comments and feedback are more than welcome.
Cheers!
Inkings of the Soul 
I think it’s good. I’ve written worse. More to the point, most readers will relate to it, which is what ‘good’ poetry should do, right?
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Aw.. I agree! Thank you. 🙂
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If you think it’s terrible than you need to reconsider your opinion.:) it’s quite good & rhythm comes as you write, also not every poetry I’ve read is rhythmic.::)
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Aw! Thank you Kaushal. I shall revise my opinion then! 🙂
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good. One more poem awaits for you.:)
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It’s good. Full of imagery. I like it.
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Glad you liked it Mick! 🙂
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That’s not a terrible start. Your writing style is on point.
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Thank you for the positive note! 🙂
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do drop in by my blog. hope you will like it.
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Sure thing! I shall visit as soon as I can find some time off to read your blog, (Adhi?). 🙂
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Adhi is totally fine. Visakha?
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Visakha it is! 🙂
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glad to connect!!!
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Not bad for a first attempt. I really like it – lots of visual in there. X
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Thank you! Do read the other posts. I write prose better than poetry I believe! I would love to hear from you on those as well. 🙂
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I look forward to reading more. X
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You get better and better and better and better… I’ll never finish. You get better every time! Keep up the good work! ^_^
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Thank you for your encouragement!!! 😀
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^_^
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Beautiful
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Thank you! 🙂
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I have written worse.This is pretty much good for a starter 🙂
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Thank you for your kind words, (Sherin?)!! 🙂
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Does my name gave you an impression that i am a female?if yes i tell you you are not alone 😛
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Haha! Even if I were foolish, I wouldn’t be blind to ignore the profile picture! 😛
I meant to confirm your name, Sir! No offence meant. 🙂
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Teek hai madam 🙂
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where is your place?christmas adichu policho?mba kazinju purathu pokanano plan?discard this if you don’t want to share such things ok? 🙂
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